2014년 10월 26일 일요일

First draft


Have you ever watch football game in the stadium? I mean, not American football, British football. It is often called 'soccer' but I will call it 'Football' because it is originally from UK. But, except this name, football has another name; 'The small society'. It is sure that many sports are called as a small society because they have various factors that are needed in the society like people and rules. So, it is possible that sports give huge impacts to the real society positively. To give you one example, Federation Internationale de Football Association, so called FIFA, suggested some solutions about many problems in our society which are possible for advancement of our society. There suggested resolutions were related to racism and discrimination about the people, health, and so on. We can notice that the head institution related to football have tried hard to make our society better. If we take those resolutions and adapt them to our society, many advantages will occur.


   Even though it has became less, still some people think sports, especially football is dangerous for children, so it is bad for them. It is true that playing football can be dangerous as it is one of the wildest sports and some children get hurts while they are playing it. However, this is unnecessary worries because the rate of children who get hurts are not that much and we have many other positive things that we can achieve by football.



  Even in our daily life, we can find out that football is also giving positive effects to the society. When we see SNS like facebook of instagram, we can figure out that many sports stars are trying to advertise campaigns like charity match or events. These days, SNS is one of the best way to communicate with global people and we can know that when we see some famous companies' marketing methods. For example, when we see Arsenal's player Jack wilshere's instagram, we can see many good campaigns are held. If these famous players keep advertising various kinds of good events and campaigns, more people will attend to those.



  Also, this is general idea but we can have healthy body if we play football. It is undoubtedly sure that if we exercise regularly, our health problem would become less. Some people worry about the injury, but that is just the process of keeping good shape of body. If we do not exercise properly, health problem would become more severe and I think this result is not desired by everybody. Do you want to be unhealthy just because you worry that you or your children can have injury? I don't think it is wise selection.



  Moreover, football can be the factor that makes world peace by insisting no discrimination of any form. If football stars play football under the slogan of no discrimination and peaceful world, children would be educated peacefully with their role models. I think all people will know that education is the most important process of children. Then, this situation is not impossible. If this happen, world peace will be easy because children have been educated with these factors and become adults. We can achieve the humanity's dream.

  It is true that many entertainers have power to control the society. That's why they are blamed if they do some crazy things. Like this, sports stars, especially football stars have big power to control people and society. If we think about them, we can say that they are under the FIFA because they are all football players. Now, let's see what FIFA aim to do for society. According to Joseph S. Blatter who is the head of FIFA, said that "FIFA’s primary objective is to improve the game of football constantly and promote it globally in the light of its unifying, educational, cultural and humanitarian values, particularly through youth and development programmes." Also, he said that "Football is much more than just a game. Its universal appeal means it has a unique power and reach which must be managed carefully. We believe that we have a duty to society that goes beyond football: to improve the lives of young people and their surrounding communities, to reduce the negative impact of our activities and to make the most we can of the positives.

Football can inspire communities and break down barriers. Football is for all. FIFA believes that everybody has the right to play football free from discrimination or prejudice and we are striving to ensure that this is the case.

We recognise, and work hard to limit, our impact on the environment, inspiring greater awareness and best practice in sustainability standards at all of our events.

This is the third crucial pillar of FIFA’s mission: building a better future for all through football."


Through this speech, we can notice what football players think about the society. By these concepts, football players are giving good impacts to the society. For example, FIFA is now conducting a campaing named "Football for the planet"(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/footballforplanet/index.html) and many players are encourage this campaign through their SNS account. This is undoubtedly desirable situation and impacts.


Also, we can think about health problem. In FIFA hompage, they said that "Health is key to development and growth. Developing countries have to fight poverty, hunger and infections, but also diseases that proliferate with increasing prosperity."(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/footballdevelopment/medical/footballforhealth/) This means they are trying to make people in the whold world helthier. This can be also good impact.



Lastly, football can make peaceful world. See this article. "The Pope met the Interreligious Match for Peace’s stars at the Vatican ahead of the game, where the teams were present with their captains Javier Zanetti and Roberto Baggio. “Use this match to say no to all forms of discrimination,” the pontiff urged. (http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2435366/index.html) As you can see, FIFA is struggling to mkae world peaceful by eliminate many negative factors in the world. I think racism can be the best example. To add recism part, Tyoko Sexwale who was the manager of 2010 South Africa world cup, said that “Racism-discrimination is a society problem, and it’s like a monster that is trying now to infiltrate sporting fields. If we don’t stand up, if we allow racism to overpower sport, we will be doomed to existence in a hostile world.” in the weekly FIFA. (http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2456567/index.html)

 Trough these things, it is sure that world can reach to the peace by football with FIFA.

  I think football can give positive impacts and make better society. However, some people said that there are more effective factors that can change society, not football. But  I don't mention about football is the best way to change society positively. However, if it has benefit, it is undoubtedly sure to do that. I think when these benefits become together, that's the proper period that society could be changed positively.

Also, some people said that it is not sure that football can give positive impacts. However, When you see examples of many football players and campaign related to them, you can notice that their power is not that small. They have enough power to change society positively. In fact, entertainers and football players are not that different if we see them as an aspect of influencing to people in the world. If we see famous entertainers, they change world with their beautiful voice or acting ability. So, it is sure that they will improve our society with football.


  As you see, football can give positive impacts to the society. It can be through football players SNS account and broadcasting system with advertising campaign, improving health problem of the people, and make the world peace by eliminate factors that can make some bad situations. Everyone in the FIFA acknowledge that they should make better world through football and they are now trying to make better world. Many people who are related to FIFA are paying attention to many social problems like racism, global warming and poor countries' famine problem. So, if we encourage football to people, it is sure that many social problems would be solved and the world becomes better place to live. So, let's make better world through football. Football should be encouraged to the world to make better world.

Conclusion

  As you see, football can give positive impacts to the society. It can be through football players SNS account and broadcasting system with advertising campaign, improving health problem of the people, and make the world peace by eliminate factors that can make some bad situations. Everyone in the FIFA acknowledge that they should make better world through football and they are now trying to make better world. Many poeple who are related to FIFA are paying attention to many social problems like racism, global warming and poor countries' famine problem. So, if we encourage football to people, it is sure that many social problems would be solved and the world become better place to live. So, let's make better world through football. Football should be encouraged to the world to make better world.

Refutation

. What is my thesis?
Cause football can give positive impacts to the society, we should encourage football.

 

2. What is the opposite position?
Football is just one of sports and it's not effect to change society.

3. What arguments can I anticipate?
a) There are more effective factors that can change society.
b) It is not sure that football can give positive impacts.
4. How will I counter these arguments?
a) I don't mention about footbal is the best way to change society positively. However, if it has benefit, it is undoubtedly sure to do that.
b) When you see examples of many football players and campaign related to them, you can notice that their power is not that small. They have enough power to change society positively.

Refutation.


  I think football can give positive impacts and make bette society. However, some people said that there are more effective factors that can change society, not football. But  I don't mention about footbal is the best way to change society positively. However, if it has benefit, it is undoubtedly sure to do that.I think when these benefits become together, that's the proper period that society could be changed positively.

Also, some people said that it is not sure that football can give positive impacts. However, When you see examples of many football players and campaign related to them, you can notice that their power is not that small. They have enough power to change society positively. In fact, entertainers and football players are not that different if we see them as an acpects of influening to people in the world. If we see famous entertainers, they change world with their beautiful voice or acting ability. So, it is sure that they will improve our society with football.

Confirmation

1. What is my thesis?
Cause football can give positive impacts to the society, we should encourage football.

 2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis? 
I am using expert interview, real examples, and some related facts.

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
Actually, it is hard to find emotional part of my essay. However, I think this is not totally good, because sometimes, emotional things are more powerful than logical things. I think I would better to add some emotional factors in my essay.


My Confirmation

  It is true that many entertainers have power to control the society. That's why they are blamed if they do some crazy things. Like this, sports stars, especially football stars have big power to control people and society. If we think about them, we can say that they are under the FIFA because they are all football players. Now, let's see what FIFA aim to do for society. According to Joseph S. Blatter who is the head of FIFA, said that "FIFA’s primary objective is to improve the game of football constantly and promote it globally in the light of its unifying, educational, cultural and humanitarian values, particularly through youth and development programmes." Also, he said that "Football is much more than just a game. Its universal appeal means it has a unique power and reach which must be managed carefully. We believe that we have a duty to society that goes beyond football: to improve the lives of young people and their surrounding communities, to reduce the negative impact of our activities and to make the most we can of the positives.
Football can inspire communities and break down barriers. Football is for all. FIFA believes that everybody has the right to play football free from discrimination or prejudice and we are striving to ensure that this is the case.
We recognise, and work hard to limit, our impact on the environment, inspiring greater awareness and best practice in sustainability standards at all of our events.
This is the third crucial pillar of FIFA’s mission: building a better future for all through football."
Through this speech, we can notice what football players think about the society. By these concepts, football players are giving good impacts to the society. For example, FIFA is now conducting a campaing named "Football for the planet"(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/footballforplanet/index.html) and many players are encourage this campaign through their SNS account. This is undoubtedly desirable situation and impacts.
 
Also, we can think about health problem. In FIFA hompage, they said that "Health is key to development and growth. Developing countries have to fight poverty, hunger and infections, but also diseases that proliferate with increasing prosperity."(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/footballdevelopment/medical/footballforhealth/) This means they are trying to make people in the whold world helthier. This can be also good impact.
 
 
Lastly, football can make peaceful world. See this article. "The Pope met the Interreligious Match for Peace’s stars at the Vatican ahead of the game, where the teams were present with their captains Javier Zanetti and Roberto Baggio. “Use this match to say no to all forms of discrimination,” the pontiff urged. (http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2435366/index.html) As you can see, FIFA is struggling to mkae world peaceful by eliminate many negative factors in the world. I think racism can be the best example. To add recism part, Tyoko Sexwale who was the manager of 2010 South Africa world cup, said that “Racism-discrimination is a society problem, and it’s like a monster that is trying now to infiltrate sporting fields. If we don’t stand up, if we allow racism to overpower sport, we will be doomed to existence in a hostile world.” in the weekly FIFA. (http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2456567/index.html)
 Trough these things, it is sure that world can reach to the peace by football with FIFA.

 

2014년 10월 25일 토요일

Narration




My persuasive argument thesis is: Football can give positive effects to the society and that's why we should encourage people to play it.


1. What do people already know about my topic?

Everyone knows that sports can give positive impacts to students. They know that energetic exercise can make our brain more active. Also, people know that sprots stars are holding charity match.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?
 

http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/organisation/mission.html -
This source is interesting but more of a general source than of concrete sources. So, I need to find more concrete sources like statistics or campaign that FIFA is doing now through football.

http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2456567/index.html -
This source is good for concrete sources when I write about the equality. I can make my grounds stronger throught this speech.

http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2435366/index.html -
This source is very good for various kind of my opinions. I can use first note to the medical part and second note for discrimination part. I will us this effectively in my essay.
 

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

Football can give positive impacts to society and this is undoubtedly true. If I'm right, we should make people to play football more to have benefits like health. Also, we should make football be dynamized to affect good impacts. But if people ignore me, it would be the problem of basic life. If one even has no ability to live normally like insufficient of water or no home, one will pay attention to other basic things which are more related to lives.

My Narration




   Even though it has became less, still some people think sports, especially football is dangerous for children, so it is bad for them. It is true that playing football can be dangerous as it is one of the wildest sports and some children get hurts while they are playing it. However, this is unnecessary worries because the rate of children who get hurts are not that much and we have many other positive things that we can achieve by football.

 

  Even in our daily life, we can find out that football is also giving positive effects to the society. When we see SNS like facebook of instagram, we can figure out that many sports stars are trying to advertise campaigns like charity match or events. These days, SNS is one of the best way to communicate with global people and we can know that when we see some famous companies' marketing methods. For example, when we see Arsenal's player Jack wilshere's instagram, we can see many good campaigns are held. If these famous players keep advertising various kinds of good events and campaigns, more people will attend to those.

 

  Also, this is general idea but we can have healthy body if we play football. It is undoubtedly sure that if we exercise regularly, our health problem would become less. Some people worry about the injury, but that is just the process of keeping good shape of body. If we do not exercise properly, health problem would become more severe and I think this result is not desired by everybody. Do you want to be unhealthy just because you worry that you or your children can have injury? I don't think it is wise selection.

 

  Moreover, football can be the factor that makes world peace by insisting no discrimination of any form. If football stars play football under the slogan of no discrimination and peaceful world, children would be educated peacefully with their role models. I think all people will know that education is the most important process of children. Then, this situation is not impossible. If this happen, world peace will be easy because children have been educated with these factors and become adults. We can achieve the humanity's dream.

 
 


 

Research 3

Source: Official FIFA hompage
http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2435366/index.html

My Topic:
 Football can give positive effects to the society and that's why we should encourage people to play it.

What I hope to learn from this source:
 FIFA is trying to reach the peace of the world. To make it, Javier Zanetti who is famous football player held charity match.

Notes:
  1. All proceeds from the event will go to the ‘An Alternative for Life’ project, which works to provide better medical care and education for children and young people in Buenos Aires. - Helping for childrens.
  2. “It is not true that football can only entertain people,” said Italy goalkeeper Gianluigi Buffon. “The Pope has invited us to pledge our commitment against any kind of discrimination and violence. Only a match like this can send that kind of message,” he continued. - He said football can change the world.

Final Thoughts:
This source is very good for various kind of my opinions. I can use first note to the medical part and second note for discrimination part. I will us this effectively in my essay.

Research 2

Source: Official FIFA hompage
http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2456567/index.html

My Topic:
 Football can give positive effects to the society and that's why we should encourage people to play it.

What I hope to learn from this source:
 FIFA is trying to eliminate racism in the whole world. So, they conduct some campaigns that related to racism.

Notes:
  1.  “It’s like a monster that is trying now to infiltrate sporting fields." - he wants to express that racism is the factor that we have to eliminate.
  2. Nowadays, FIFA's main mission is to eliminate racism to make equal world.

Final Thoughts:
This source is good for concrete sources when I write about the equality. I can make my grounds stronger throught this speech.

Reserach 1

Source: Official FIFA hompage
http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/organisation/mission.html

My Topic:
 Football can give positive effects to the society and that's why we should encourage people to play it.

What I hope to learn from this source:
 In the official hompage of FIFA, they said their mission is als related to make better society.

Notes:
  1. Football is much more than just a game. - This sentence is the best expression that show will of FIFA.
  2. These informations are good for suggest general ideas and I need more concrete sources to persuade readers.

Final Thoughts:
This source is interesting but more of a general source than of concrete sources. So, I need to find more concrete sources like statistics or campaign that FIFA is doing now through football.

Week 6


  Have you ever watch football game in the stadium? I mean, not American football, British football. It is often called 'soccer' but I will call it 'Football' because it is originally from UK. But, except this name, football has another name; 'The small society'. It is sure that many sports are called as a small society because they have various factors that are needed in the society like people and rules. So, it is possible that sports give huge impacts to the real society positively. To give you one example, Federation Internationale de Football Association, so called FIFA, suggested some solutions about many problems in our society which are possible for advancement of our society. There suggested resolutions were related to racism and discrimination about the people, health, ethics and so on. We can notice that the head institution related to football have tried hard to make our society better. If we take those resolutions and adapt them to our society, many advantages will occur.

2014년 10월 9일 목요일

Week 3 obectives

  1. Articulate your argument.
  2. Start outlining your first draft in the classical argument format.

2. Outlining

Intro

Football can be described as a small society.
-> There are rules, players, victory or defeat, and so on.
This means that football can give some impacts on society.


Body

Football can give positive impacts to the society.

1. Famous football star can induce public to participate in meaningful campaign.
-> This is possible through SNS and other media.

2. By playing football, children can have better personalities like cooperation or patience. Also, their health problem will be better if they play the football regularly.
-> There are several researches about this fact.
 
3. Supporters from each football team can learn desirable competition by supporting in the unit of fan club.
-> Communal culture can teach many things like discipline.

Con

So, we should popularize football to make better world.
It can give good impacts to the whold world.


Articulation

1) My argument 
I want to argue about the effects of football. I think football can give various positive effects to the society. It can be the aspects of health, human relationship, and so on. If we struggle to develop the effects of football, we can expand to many other parts.

2) How I found my argument
My first research question was, what are positive effects that sports can give society. With the investigation, I could find tons of effects that sports give to the society with affirmative. Theses articles helped me to write lots of backing informations. Also, while I kept researching about this topic, I realized that many pedagogists agree that sports can give positive impacts to youth by making their body and also mental advantages. By this information, I could make my body stronger.

3) New research questions
 I have several questions that need to be resolved.
a) What kinds of effect that football can give to the society?
b) What are negative effects of football?
c) How can we maximize the effectiveness of football?
d) How many people can receive positive effects by football?

4) Connections to the Harvard Sampler How is your argument connected to the Harvard Sampler? ANY CONNECTION IS VALID. Please focus on choosing a good argument first, then think about how it is related to the Harvard Sampler. I will help you think of the connection if necessary.
This argument has many connections to the Harvard Sampler. First, it obviously is directly related to the human mind. Second, it connects to medical detectives because there are lots of medical questions about the physical nature of our brain. It also relates to evolution because I can address how the power of the brain is what led to humans being the dominant species on the planet. Last, the internet is the most powerful product and playground of modern computing, so when comparing the mind to computers I will need to look at the mind versus the internet.