2014년 11월 16일 일요일

Second draft

second draft



Have you ever watch football game in the stadium? I mean, not American football, British football. It is often called 'soccer' but I will call it 'Football' because it is originally from UK. But, except this name, football has another name; 'The small society'. It is sure that many sports are called as a small society because they have various factors that are needed in the society like people and rules. So, it is possible that sports give huge impacts to the real society positively. This means you can receive that impact whether you are student or adult. To give you one example, Federation Internationale de Football Association, so called FIFA, suggested some solutions about many problems in our society which are possible for advancement of our society. There suggested resolutions were related to racism and discrimination about the people, health, and so on. We can notice that the head institution related to football have tried hard to make our society better. If we take those resolutions and adapt them to our society, many advantages will occur. In this essay, I want to tell you about the aspects of marketing, health, and peace.



Football can give positive impacts to society and this is undoubtedly true. If I'm right, we should make people to play football more to have benefits like health. Also, we should make football be promoted to affect good impacts. But if people ignore me, it might be the problem of basic life. If one even has no ability to live normally like in the environment of insufficient of water or no home, one will pay attention to that kinds of basic things which are more related to lives than football. However, we have to think about that football can change the society and it will make many people to live with the fulfillment of fundamental factors like I said just before. 



   Even though it has become less, still some people think sports, especially football is dangerous for children, so it is bad for them. It is true that playing football can be dangerous as it is one of the wildest sports. However, this is unnecessary worries because the rate of children who get hurts during playing it are not that much and we have many other positive things that we can achieve by football like peace of the world and good health.



  Even in our daily life, we can find out that football is also giving positive effects to the society. When we see SNS like facebook of instagram, we can figure out that many sports stars are trying to advertise campaigns like charity match or events. These days, SNS is one of the best way to communicate with global people and we can know that when we see some famous companies' marketing methods. For example, when we see Arsenal's player Jack wilshere's instagram, we can find out that many good campaigns are held. If these famous players keep advertising various kinds of good events and campaigns, more people will attend to those.



  Also, this is general idea but we can have healthy body if we play football. It is undoubtedly sure that if we exercise regularly, our health problem would become less. Some people worry about the injury, but that is just the process of keeping good shape of body. If we do not exercise properly, health problem would become more severe and I think this result is not desired by everybody. Do you want to be unhealthy just because you worry that you or your children can have injury? I don't think it is wise selection.



  Moreover, football can be the factor that makes world peace by insisting no discrimination of any form. If football stars play football under the slogan of no discrimination and peaceful world, children would be educated peacefully with their role models. I think all people will know that education is the most important process of children. Then, this situation is not impossible. If this happen, world peace will be easy because children have been educated with these factors and become adults. We can achieve the humanity's dream.

  It is true that many entertainers have power to control the society. That's why they are blamed if they do some crazy things. Like this, sports stars, especially football stars have big power to control people and society. If we think about them, we can say that they are under the FIFA because they are all football players. Now, let's see what FIFA aim to do for society. According to Joseph S. Blatter who is the head of FIFA, said that "FIFA’s primary objective is to improve the game of football constantly and promote it globally in the light of its unifying, educational, cultural and humanitarian values, particularly through youth and development programmes." Also, he said that "Football is much more than just a game. Its universal appeal means it has a unique power and reach which must be managed carefully. We believe that we have a duty to society that goes beyond football: to improve the lives of young people and their surrounding communities, to reduce the negative impact of our activities and to make the most we can of the positives.

Football can inspire communities and break down barriers. Football is for all. FIFA believes that everybody has the right to play football free from discrimination or prejudice and we are striving to ensure that this is the case.



We recognise, and work hard to limit, our impact on the environment, inspiring greater awareness and best practice in sustainability standards at all of our events.



This is the third crucial pillar of FIFA’s mission: building a better future for all through football."



(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/organisation/mission.html)



Through this speech, we can notice what football players think about the society. By these concepts, football players are giving good impacts to the society. For example, FIFA is now conducting a campaing named "Football for the planet"(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/footballforplanet/index.html) and many players are encourage this campaign through their SNS account. This is undoubtedly desirable situation and impacts.






Also, we can think about health problem. In FIFA hompage, they said that "Health is key to development and growth. Developing countries have to fight poverty, hunger and infections, but also diseases that proliferate with increasing prosperity."(http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/footballdevelopment/medical/footballforhealth/) This means they are trying to make people in the whole world healthier. The most effective way to be healthy is undoubtedly diet and exercise. By playing football, you can be healthier and this will make your health of spirit healthier too. Then, I think you already know the result. Healthier spirit and body means the positive change of society.









Lastly, football can make peaceful world. See this article. "The Pope met the Interreligious Match for Peace’s stars at the Vatican ahead of the game, where the teams were present with their captains Javier Zanetti and Roberto Baggio. “Use this match to say no to all forms of discrimination,” the pontiff urged. (http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2435366/index.html) As you can see, FIFA is struggling to make world peaceful by eliminate many negative factors in the world. I think racism can be the best example. To add racism part, Tyoko Sexwale who was the manager of 2010 South Africa world cup, said that “Racism-discrimination is a society problem, and it’s like a monster that is trying now to infiltrate sporting fields. If we don’t stand up, if we allow racism to overpower sport, we will be doomed to existence in a hostile world.” in the weekly FIFA. (http://www.fifa.com/aboutfifa/socialresponsibility/news/newsid=2456567/index.html)



 Through these things, it is sure that world can reach to the peace by football with FIFA.



  I think football can give positive impacts and make better society. However, some people said that there are more effective factors that can change society, not football. But I don't mention about football is the best way to change society positively. However, if it has benefit, it is undoubtedly sure to do that. I think when these benefits become together, that's the proper period that society could be changed positively.

Also, some people said that it is not sure that football can give positive impacts. However, when you see examples of many football players and campaign related to them, you can notice that their power is not that small. They have enough power to change society positively. In fact, entertainers and football players are not that different if we see them as an aspect of influencing to people in the world. If we see famous entertainers, they change world with their beautiful voice or acting ability. So, it is sure that they will improve our society with football.


  As you see, football can give positive impacts to the society. It can be through football players SNS account and broadcasting system with advertising campaign, improving health problem of the people, and make the world peace by eliminate factors that can make some bad situations. Everyone in the FIFA acknowledge that they should make better world through football and they are now trying to make better world. Many people who are related to FIFA are paying attention to many social problems like racism, global warming and poor countries' famine problem. So, if we encourage football to people, it is sure that many social problems would be solved and the world becomes better place to live. So, let's make better world through football. Football should be encouraged to the world to make better world.

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